“Lift off in 10 seconds”, yelled the commander. “Roger that”, Mark said terrifyingly. 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1, lift off. WOOOOOOOSH! “AAAAAAHHHHHH!” Mark screamed as loud as he could. Up and up he went. Finally, he approached the mouth dropping moon. He tiptoed out. Suddenly, he saw a massive apple, just floating there. Nervously, Mark took a humongous bite out of it. All of a sudden, that apple turned into an Alien! Was I seeing things, or going mad?


3 thoughts on “christopher

  1. Christopher, another great piece of writing! You have been creative in your opening sentence, starting it in an interesting way and you have also tried to use different sentence openers. Fab punctuation as well, look at it all! Next time write just as well but try not to use too many simple sentences (it is getting better but try a little harder!)
    Miss T

  2. I like the way you ended in a retorical question to get the reader thinking. Good work Chris. B.S 😀

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