www diary by bc

Dear diary,
Today I left port at Southampton with my crew on the one o 7 hamsly . That night I went out of deck and looked around then I heard a noise “mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm’’ “boss boss look” it was a germen bomber “BANG” he looked back the ship was on fire. There was a speaker on board “all “hands on lower deck “ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh’’ .
Just then every one fell in the water it was blue and green all they could see was water “mmmmmmmmmmmmm” a English bomber cam over and rescued them thank you yourock you are the best in the world…

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One thought on “www diary by bc

  1. Hi! An unusual and clever way to use this week’s prompt. I enjoyed reading it very much. I especially liked your sound effects! If you re-read your story, could you make it stronger by adding some more commas? Where would you put them?
    Well done and I look forward to reading more from you.

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