100wchallenge by Ben

We have just discovered something that we did not know was here. We were sailing through the Atlantic Ocean looking for the great white shark, but we came across something that know body knew was washed up on this beach, it was the back of titanic. It was the most amazing discovery of all why did it not come up on are radar. Are torches are flickering in the ships shadowy insides. The old fragile doors demolished, shattered, countless pieces of glass all around us everywhere. It was the most amazing discovery ever found. We are all overwhelmed with this discovery.

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  1. Well done, Ben for this great 100wc! You have described the scene brilliantly – I’m very impressed. I love the vocabulary choices you have made. e.g. overwhelmed, countless.

    Take care though with ‘our’ as you have mis-spelt it. My class do it all the time.

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